Hey Andy (mind if i call ya this?? ;) )

Well personally I completely agree with u about chap 8, if you don't
like to change POVs in-between... But because the plot has started
now I think you can expand your horizons to wider perspective, and
then eventually the chapter will be bigger.

Since this is your first story (a great one for a first BTW) I recon
you should explore more… I recon you should take a look at an
awesome story a bit like yours, "Say You Love Me" by Phoenix at
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/phoenix_587/files/Say%20You%20Love%
20Me/
, so you could get some thing out of it, may be you can write to the
guy… Hey but don't lose your authenticity; be your self and follow
your instincts, that's why your stories are so good.

Cheers
Jay





>
> Hi Jay,
>
> Thanks, it would be interesting to know what people think about
this.
> Personally I didn't think that chapter 8 could go on for much
longer
> because the point of view needed to be changed and I don't like
> changing half way through. I didn't even know other members could
> create polls, but now I know you can then feel free to add them.
>
> This is to Aleck, for some reason your post didn't go through
maybe I
> clicked the wrong button to approve it. Could you please re-post it
> please?
>
> Thanks,
>
> Andrew xx