Hello Dick how are you?, . I`m sorry I keep worrying you with my apostrophes and
anyone else reading my poetry, but I honestly can`t help it it`s just the way
that I write ok. thank you for setting my poem out as it should look I
appreciate it but I disagree with you you are a poet my friend and good one ok.
I will try to keep your suggestions on board next time ok. btw if I can help you
on your board as a moderator let me know ok, and I will because I did that job
a long time ago on compuserve. take care of yourself and I hope real life
issue`s etc will let you write again one day on this board because I miss you
when your not around and miss reading your poem`s too Dick . take care of
yourself Valerie (Val)

Dick Eburne <rjceburne@...> wrote: --- In
reaspoetrygrotto@..., "valerie946475"
<valeriedavenport@b...> wrote:
>

> September girl
>
> Clear blue eye`s
> and startled cries
> how well do I remember
> that day in september
>
> it will be 18 year`s ago soon in september
> that our baby girl was born how well I remember
> how fast the time has flown past
> memory`s that we have our september girl has made them to last
>
> blue eye`s she has and a smile to set heart`s in a whirl
> that`s our september birthday girl
> hope she enjoy`s her disco party with friend`s of her all makeing a
> fuss
> while we quietly thank god for all the joy and happiness she has
> given to us

I still worry about your apostrophes, Valerie, even while I enjoy
your poetry. I think it could be laid out in a different ay to make
it easier for others to follow.

Here is my idea of a corrected version, with apostrophes in the right
place when needed:

September Girl

Clear blue eyes
and startled cries
how well do I remember
that day in September

It will be 18 years ago
soon in September
that our baby girl was born
how well I remember

How fast the time has flown
past memories that we have
our September girl
has made them to last

Blue eyes she has and a smile
to set hearts in a whirl
that`s our September birthday girl

Hope she enjoys her disco party
with friends of hers
all making a fuss
while we quietly thank God
for all the joy and happiness
she has given to us

Please don't take my suggestions as anything more than hints. I'm not
a poet, and I know it.

Dick









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