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"For as long as she could remember sleep had occasionally brought
Ophelia Keswick visions of the future. Something that she considered
to be a curse rather than a blessing. Still she was used to the eerie
clarity that came with her foreknowledge so it was unsettling to find
herself blinking in the sunlight streaming through her bedroom window
as she strained to remember the details of a future she was sure she
had dreamed. Even so there was no hint that the dream had foretold the
coming day would change her life – and eventually the world – forever."

Bad? Mundane? Generic? Clunky? Confusing?

Please critique.







Fri Mar 3, 2006 10:26 pm

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